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Some believe that traffic problems in cities can best be resolved by investing in urban infrastructure while others feel there are superior solutions. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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 It is argued by some that improvement of urban's architecture would cause a decrease in
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traffic
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 jam, others think other measures like optimising public transport
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 applying beneficial rules for commuters can be more effective. On one hand, a great
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 of
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 issues is
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 of a lack of management in the structure of the cities.
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crowded streets with spacious highways would effectively affect heavy traffics. Plus, smart engineering of the places in which the risk of accidents is excessive would help to reduce wasting time in the distance.
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, the
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 of places which should go undergo a change to cause reducing
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 is not few and it can be
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 of spending a lot of money which is not possible in all cases.
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, the cost of applying the rules for driving with more passengers in rush hours
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 social awareness of the pollution which is caused by more and more cars
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 is so much cheaper.
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, making
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public transport more convenient and beneficial would efficiently affect the
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 of cars. In conclusion, changing the structure of urban areas can greatly affect
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heavy
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.
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, In my opinion, other methods are more effective in a great
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 of cases and can
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 in decreasing the level of pollution.
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, the main goal would be reached
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faster way.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban infrastructure
  • traffic congestion
  • bottlenecks
  • public transportation systems
  • cycling lanes
  • pedestrian pathways
  • telecommuting
  • smart traffic management
  • AI and IoT
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing services
  • vehicular traffic
  • alternative means of transport
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