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3.Some people think that having a set retiremnt age (e.g 65 years) for everyone, regardless off occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retiremnent? –

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The
retirement
age
 is a controversial issue,
while
 many suggest that all
individuales
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individuals
 must be retired at a certain
age
, others believe that the time and hardships of the job should have an influence on the
retirement
age
.
this
 essay will discuss the different views
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this
 topic
while
 claiming that certain workers should benefit from early
retirement
.
due to
 the differences among
jobs
 on the aspect of their difficulties, some believe that the harder a job gets, the sooner the
retirement
 should be. they argue that by
this
 benefit, more people would be interested in taking those
jobs
.
For instance
, people with
physicaly-demanding
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physically demanding
jobs
 like miners or nurses should be retired sooner
that
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than
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secreteries
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secretaries
 or computer engineers who have less physical pressure
due to
 their work. on the
contorary
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contrary
 many support the idea of a set
retirement
age
, arguing that for some
jobs
 like physicians or medical
specilists
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specialists
, the training and education years are more than that of most other majors, and
this
 time should be somehow included in the
retirement
 time.
thus
 a certain
age
 is beneficial. in
conclusion
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 there should not be a set
retirement
age
 for all
jobs
.
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