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A lot of people spend a major part of their adult life at work, so job satisfaction is very important for individual happiness. What are the main factors that contribute to job satisfaction? What are the possible solutions for people who are unsatisfied with their jobs?

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It is public/common knowledge that nowadays for people one of the most crucial life achievements is being satisfied with their
job
.
This
 essay will first discuss which factors contribute to
job
 satisfaction and what is more, it will offer a solution to these workers who are unsatisfied with their occupation.   
To begin
 with,
job
 satisfaction relies on
wage
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wages
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, a good
work
 atmosphere and your colleagues.
Firstly
, experts believe that highly-paid professions are being chosen by people more and more often. During their education years, students think about what to do in their life to earn a huge amount of money.
Secondly
, a pleasant atmosphere is always required. Employees need a safe and healthy
work
 area,
due to
fact
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that
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because
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 it affects their day at
work
.
Last
 but not least, every
work
 should have a good and friendly
work
 team.
Instead
 of a rat race, you should help and support each other. 
In addition
, under no circumstance should you do
the
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job
 that you feel is unpleasant and unsatisfying.
Obviously
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 it is extremely hard to change your occupation in one day or even a month, but there are a few solutions to resolve
this
 problem. In general, there are plenty of places which help you find new
work
 and help with a
job
 application.
However
, what you can do is try to find what you like.
In other words
, if you are keen on cooking, you should try to become a chef. Giving an example, my aunt didn’t have maternity leave, so she quit her
job
. She felt a little bit stressed and scared,
however
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 she took her chances and didn’t regret
this
. She has found a
job
 which is well-paid and she is satisfied.  All in all, it is true that adults spend a lot of their time at
work
,
as
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and as
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 a
result
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,result
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job
 satisfaction is a crucial thing for them. There are several factors that contribute to being pleased with your
job
,
hence
 we should remember
about
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them.
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