Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
One of the most controversial issues around the world is
public
health and every nation is wondering to help their citizens to improve Add an article
a public
this
condition.Meanwhile
some Add a comma
,Meanwhile
people
believe with
increasing the number of facilities we can gain a good result but some opine,Change preposition
by
this
way is not enough to solve the proplem
.I can neither agree nor disagree with Correct your spelling
problem
this
statement and in this
essay,I explain both view
and my opinion with some examples.
It is well-established fact that,Correct pronoun usage
my view
have
routine exercises can help us to be more healthy.Wrong verb form
having
For example
,there are
numerous Change the verb form
is
body builder
Correct your spelling
bodybuilder
in
social media Change preposition
on
such
as instagram
or youtube that Change the capitalization
Instagram
they
share their experience and explain how they could change their life by doing Correct pronoun usage
apply
some
routine activities in clubs or Correct quantifier usage
apply
gym
.Fix the agreement mistake
gyms
In addition
,if some sport
facilities,for free,increase in Change the noun form
sports
the
each part of the city Remove the article
apply
people
can access to
them and they encourage to do exercise.
Change preposition
apply
On the other hand
,there are other factors that can be effective.Some people
with sedentary
Add an article
a sedentary
lifestyle
are not aware of the consequence of their motionless lifestyle.In Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
this
case,first of all, other
should help them to increase their knowledge about Correct pronoun usage
others
importance
of health.Add an article
the importance
For instance
,governments
duties should not Change noun form
governments'
government's
however
be taken lightly in this
issue.Government should produce appropriate programs not only in
tv but Change preposition
on
also
create banners in the street to increase the awareness of people
about health.In addition
,some famouse
athletes Correct your spelling
famous
in
social media should persuade Change preposition
on
people
to eat more vegetables and fresh fruits and give them some useful advises
.
Replace the word
advice
To sum up
,individuals should take an
even simple steps to help themselves to gain well-being.The government Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
also
can have a
enormous Change the article
an
roles
to help Correct the article-noun agreement
role
people
. In my perspective with the cooperation of both
we can gain the desired result.Add a comma
,both
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