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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer language in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#year #languages #people #life #language #world
One of the most controversial issues around the
world
 is speaking foreign
languages
.Meanwhile,there are
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 that many
languages
 extinct every year.Some
people
 believe,
this
 is not
important
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 phenomenon but it can be more beneficial for all
people
 around the
world
.I can neither agree nor disagree with
this
 statement,and I believe, there are some merits and demerits
if
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 many
languages
 die out.And
this
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examples
. On the
on
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 hand,it is well-established fact that
,
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communication with
people
 around the
world
 has become important in
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decade
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.some
people
belive
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 we do not need some
languages
 and
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that absences
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absences
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absence
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 of them can not harm us.The reason is that,governments have numerous
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 about different topics,not only for
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 or
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 materials or substances but only about global issues. And they need to know other
languages
 or have a translator to be able to communicate.In these
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 it can be beneficial if
people
 can speak
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the same or international
language
 and
People
 do not need to spend more money for learning new
languages
 or to have
translator
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.
In addition
,without
language
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a language
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 barrier
people
 can have many job opportunities all over the
world
 and can share their knowledge,ideas and experiences with
people
 around the
world
 without restriction.
On the other hand
,
disappearance
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 of
language
 means,
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the extiction
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extiction
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extinction
 of culture.
Variety
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 of
languages
 shows
variety
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a variety
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in
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 cultures and customs.Because every
language
illustrate
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illustrates
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specific
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 tribe and custom.
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 eradicating
of
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this
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languages
 or
accent
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accents
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 we can harm
to
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peoples
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people's
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 nature.
For instance
,many
of
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traditional myths,secrets or many transcriptions are written or documented in
a traditional
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traditional languages
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languages
.If they die out,
peoples
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culture
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cultures
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 will be
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.
To sum up
.I
compeletly
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completely
 disagree that variety in
languages
are
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 not important for us.It can
also
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An even
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next
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the next
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 generation can choose with
foreign
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a foreign
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language
can
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 be more beneficial and productive for them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • endangered languages
  • homogenization
  • cross-cultural communication
  • language preservation
  • intellectual diversity
  • cultural heritage
  • language revitalization
  • monolingual
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  • dialects
  • ethnolinguistics
  • language policy
  • lingua franca
  • universal language
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