You are going to another country to study. you would like to do a part-time job while you are studying , so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. write a letter to this friend. give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part time job suggest how your friend could help you to find a job

Dear Aman, hope you are doing better. I am writing a letter to express my concerns about a part-time position in your city, Toronto. As you know, I have been admitted to a critical care health course for two years at Sence University.
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, I want to put shed on a learning schedule, my classes will start on the 7th of September,
as well as
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I will have to go three days a week from Monday to Wednesday and the rest of the days I will be free at home
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why I am looking a part-time job to run my basics expenses.
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, all tuition fee is funded by my father so I am not worried about that but
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can not bother my family again with my expenditures. it will be great if I find a part-time job in your city as it will be helpful for me. As far as I know, you are doing a job in a cafe as a manager even I read vacancy advertisements at your working location so could you refer me there? I would be grateful to you for
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help. Looking forward to hearing from you soon, take care and stay healthy. Your love Dalbir Kaur

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coherence
Consider organizing your ideas into clearer paragraphs. For example, you can separate your study plans, reasons for wanting a job, and how your friend can help into distinct paragraphs.
accuracy
There are some minor grammatical errors that could be improved for better clarity. Make sure to double-check your writing for sentence structure and verb forms.
tone
You have a friendly and warm tone throughout the letter, which is great for personal correspondence.
task achievement
You clearly stated your study plans and your reasons for needing a part-time job, demonstrating a clear purpose for your letter.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • excited
  • study plans
  • university
  • course
  • duration
  • part-time job
  • support yourself
  • financially
  • gain work experience
  • meet new people
  • suggest
  • opportunities
  • apply
  • interested
  • cafe
  • retail
  • internship
  • field of study
  • appreciation
  • eager
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