The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants.

The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants.
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The pie chart below illustrates the
food
budget
and the average family expenditures on
restaurant
meals
in various
years
,
while
the graph compares the
number
of
meals
eaten in fast
food
restaurants or sit-down restaurants.
Overall
, the percentage of home cooking decreased through the
years
to be equal to the percentage of the
food
budget
spent on
restaurant
meals
in 2015.
while
,
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fast
food
meals
increased dramatically to 90 overstepping the sit-down
restaurant
meals
in 2010. Looking into more details, in 1985, the majority of people relied on home cooking, and only 10% spent their
food
budget
on
restaurant
meals
. In 1995,
this
proportion increased slightly to 15%. After 10
years
, the proportion of expenditure on
restaurant
meals
saw a notable increase, accounting for 35%. More rise was seen in the proportion of
food
budget
spent on
restaurant
meals
until it became equal to home cooking. Now moving to the graph, in 1980, the
number
of fast
food
meals
and sit-down
restaurant
meals
was both 20. The former rose slightly to 28
meals
,
while
the latter increased significantly to 35
meals
in 1990.
However
, the
number
of fast
food
meals
grew quickly through the
years
until it reached 90
meals
per year in 2010.
while
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the
number
of sit-down
restaurant
meals
kept expanding gradually accounting for 44
meals
per year in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, budget, restaurant, meals, years, number with synonyms.
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