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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everythin organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about it?

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Some
people
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 today have almost no time to clean,
wether
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there
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home
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workplace
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, because of fast pace work of some
people
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, but
i
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 believe it is essential to have
a
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clean and organized
sorroundings
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surroundings
, I agree with
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 essay, because
clean
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 and organized place can make your mood good. It is very important to have a clean
home
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 and
workplace
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,
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 because being clean and organized can reflect your personality,
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 in the
workplace
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, when you are a new employee to that company, and you are always organized
at
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 your stuff at your office, you have a good chance to have a promotion, if your manager always saw your organized and clean
behavior
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 in the
workplace
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.
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, cleanliness is very important, because covid 19 is around, so it is essential to keep clean always on your
sorroundings
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surroundings
 to prevent
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 to spread.
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,
people
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 should
organized
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 everything not only in the
workplace
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 but
also
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 in
there
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their
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home
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,
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, when you find something, like documents, you should
organized
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 that documents, or put
level
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 and marker, so that you can easily find
it
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them
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.
Some
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 study
of
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 one of the
professor
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professors
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in
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at
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 Harvard University in America that being organized and clean can have a
succesful
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successful
 life in the future compared to other individuals who have not organised
of
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there
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 stuff, and
also
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 cleanliness can make
people
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ahppy
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happy
 and cheerful. In my conclusion, Some
people
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 today have almost no time to clean
of
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apply
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there
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their
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workplace
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 and organized everything at
home
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, but
i
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 believe that cleanliness and being organized can make
people
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 happy and make
there
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their
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 mood very cheerful.
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