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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart below illustrates the percentage of
households
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 in owned and rented houses in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
Overall
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, in England and Wales house owners in 1918 were really a few
percentages
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percentage
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 of people (above 20 per
cent
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) but at
this
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 time
households
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 in rented apartments were in huge numbers (under 80 per
cent
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) . In 1971 , both
household's
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household
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 percentages become equal but in 2011
households
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 in owned houses increased respectively and
households
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 in rented accommodation fell dramatically. For the
start
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 20 per
cent
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 of
households
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 increased to 50 per
cent
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 in 1971 and become the same as
households
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 in rented accommodation but
this
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 percentage started to raise up in 2001 to 69 per
cent
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,
however
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,
this
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 percentage
feel
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fell
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 to 63 in 2011.
Households
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 in rented houses were under 80 per
cent
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 and decreased dramatically to 32 per
cent
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 in 2001. in 2011
this
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numbers
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number
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also
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 fell to 20 per
cent
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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