Online currencies have become more common in recent years. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative development? Many people today would argue that cinemas are becoming irrelevant due to new streaming services. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, finding peace to enjoy watching

movie

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become a

tend

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Alternative

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between cinema and

steaming

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streaming

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apps. Nowadays, we have more options to choose from

steaming

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streaming

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apps

such

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Netflix

, YouTube, prime etc. I believed that people chose watching movies at home not just only saving budget ,

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always

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the cosy ,

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and unlimited time to pause the

movie

whenever they prefer , on top of that people having busy nowadays ,

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is a great way to

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they can share the time with family

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home

tasks Personally, I would love to choose to watch

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a movie

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movie

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in cinemas rather than watch at home , the main reason

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movie

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industry is matter

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me , we not

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only enjoy the

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behind

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the

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we are supporting all the team and staff put a great effort in the film.

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every theatre is unique and

have

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their

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own value and

provide

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lightly different service to customers.

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, which

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a huge diamond screen , 3D perfect quality sound, massive large

comfort

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chair.

Apart from

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, it gives a great opportunity to gather friends and family together to share and create a great moment together,

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extend

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them to share their feeling and perspective after the film. In conclusion,

although

the

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steaming apps

quite

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popular and

convenience

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integrate

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into people’s daily life. I would argue that the former cannot replace the latter, because the value of watching in theatre is including the experience and 3D sensory in it.

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, I strongly think that after covid , everyone

keen

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to join in the Community and social life.

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Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem?

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Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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