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The chart below gives information about how people aged25-34 are housedin the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting on the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives information about how people aged25-34 are housedin the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting on the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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This
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 is a bar chart that showed that people aged 25 to 34 are housed in the UK.
First,
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the horizontal axis showed
years
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the years
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 from 2004 to 2014 and the vertical axis showed
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the percent
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percent
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 of households aged 25 to 34. Now, turning to the details, in 2004 the data of
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home
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homeowners
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owners
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 peaked, but the
renters
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 were only about 20%. Between
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2004 to 2008, the
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home
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homeowners
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owners
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were slowly decrease
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were slowly decreased
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, but
renters
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 moderately went up. From 2009, the
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home
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homeowners
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owners
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 began sharply decline unit 2014,
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nevertheless
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 the
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homeowners
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owners
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 only
were
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less
40
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than 40
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%. The
renters
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 began dramatically climbing
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 2014.
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, the
renters
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 to top about more than 45% in 2014. In 2011 and 2012, the data of
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home
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owners
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 was similar
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to
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 the
renters
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.
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, The data of
renters
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 were over the
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homeowners
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owners
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 in 2013. In
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this
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 bar chart occurred haw people aged 25 - 24 are housed in the UK.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words home, owners, renters with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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