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Some people think that government should be held responsible when problem of homelessness snd unemployment arise.Do you agree or disagree

#people #government #homelessness #snd #unemployment
These days the world has a big
problem
 with homelessness and unemployment so,some people think that it must
government
 fixed that,
while
 others believe that responsibility for The richest people.
This
 essay will discuss both sides and will draw my personal conclusion. On one hand, the
government
 must case
this
problem
 and make a new situation for
homeless
Correct article usage
the homeless
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.
For example
,
a poor communities
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poor communities
a poor community
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 can not study because education is not free and they can rent a home or buy things for
children
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their children
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 so, that's why some think that it must be fixed
this
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in this
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 case.
On the other hand
,
unemployed
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the unemployed
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 now can not find a job for a living.To illustrate,
government
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the government
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 need to make new projects to develop employee for jobs.
Hence
 the belief
that is
good
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a good
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 chance for the employee.
In addition
, new projects for employees make a lot of jobs for people.For an instance, when
government
 develop employees they can finish
this
problem
.
This
 proves clearly
that
is
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apply
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the best
projects
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project
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 to end
this
problem
. In conclusion,after
analysis
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analysing
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 both
point
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points
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 of view, I believe that case
this
problem
 for the homeless and employees we must look at them and make a plan to end
this
.we need the to
government
 fixed
this
problem
 and make a good life for them.
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