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The table below shows the proportion of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998.

The table below shows the proportion of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998.
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The given table represents the proportion of
money
 spent on 4 common items by adults and children in the UK in 1998.
Overall
,
while
 women spent the highest
amount
 of
money
 on
food
, their expenditure on
video
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the video
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 category was the lowest one.
On
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In
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music
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the music
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category
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 the highest expenditure was represented by both
boys
 and girls. Spending 39% of income on
food
 women surpassed all other age groups.
However
, the
amount
 of
money
 spent by men and women on electronic
equipment
 and
videos
 was the highest
with1
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with 1
% and 0,5% respectively. On average, 112% was spent by men on
food
 and electronic
equipment
,
while
 their
spendings
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spending
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 on
music
 and
videos
 accounted for 7% in total. Adults spent the same
amount
 of
money
 on electronic
equipment
 and
music
,
this
amount
 of
money
 was 5 times higher compared to the proportion of income they spent on
videos
, which was 1%.
By contrast
, children,
boys
, and girls spent almost the same on
food
 with
1
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a 1
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% difference between each. The category in which children,
boys
, and girls dominated was
the
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apply
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music
 with theirs
39
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at 39
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%, 38%,
40
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and 40
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% respectively.
In addition
,
boys
 spent 18% equally on electronic
equipment
 and
videos
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, amount, food, music, boys, equipment, videos with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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