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The charts Below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the word. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relevant.

The charts Below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the word. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relevant.
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The pie charts give information about the consumption of
water
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 for different targets in North
America
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, South
America
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, Europe, Africa, Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen from the pie charts that most of the
water
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 is used for agriculture and for industrial applying than for housing needs
such
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 as cleaning the house or cooking in all countries which are given there. A significant proportion of the
water
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 usage employed for agriculture in Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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, Africa and South
America
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, precisely at 88, 84, 81, and 71 per cent;
however
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, inhabitants who live in other countries tend to use
water
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 more economically so that there
are
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is
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 the proportion of usage is under a two fifth.
As a result
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, in countries where
water
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applied
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is applied
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 less for agriculture
such
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 as Europe and North
America
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, use it for industrial needs, at under
a
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apply
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half,
while
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 in other states the employing
water
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 for
this
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 purpose can not reach even 10 per cent. The least of
water
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 consumed for domestic goals and in South
America
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, Europe and Noth
America
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 people applying the percentage is under a fifth,
whereas
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 in other states it is under than 10 per cent.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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