The charts Below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the word. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relevant.

The charts Below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the word. 

summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relevant.
The pie charts give information about the consumption of
water
for different targets in North
America
, South
America
, Europe, Africa, Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
.
Overall
, it can be seen from the pie charts that most of the
water
is used for agriculture and for industrial applying than for housing needs
such
as cleaning the house or cooking in all countries which are given there. A significant proportion of the
water
usage employed for agriculture in Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
, Africa and South
America
, precisely at 88, 84, 81, and 71 per cent;
however
, inhabitants who live in other countries tend to use
water
more economically so that there
are
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the proportion of usage is under a two fifth.
As a result
, in countries where
water
applied
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is applied
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less for agriculture
such
as Europe and North
America
, use it for industrial needs, at under
a
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apply
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half,
while
in other states the employing
water
for
this
purpose can not reach even 10 per cent. The least of
water
consumed for domestic goals and in South
America
, Europe and Noth
America
people applying the percentage is under a fifth,
whereas
in other states it is under than 10 per cent.
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