The diagrams below show the development of small fishing village its surrounding area into a large European tourist resort.
The diagram illustrates the changes that occurred in a small fishing
village
and its surrounding area and transformed it into a large European tourist resort. Overall
, so many things changed in this
area from buildings arriving to the population.
Looking into more details, in 1974,the fishing village
was directly surrounded by olives, woodland behind it there was also
a small village
. In addition
, a village
with sheep and goats was located in the far north of the fishing village
.
Now moving to 2004, the fishing village
flourished with hotels,
and beaches, and it remained to contain homes of locals. Remove the comma
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In addition
, a new road has been constructed west of the village
, leading to the neighbouring village
, which stopped using sheep and goats. This
road leads also
to the far mountains. The woodland was replaced by a golf course, and it became surrounded by hotels and several buildings in front of the beach. The village
behind it,
contains now tourist shops. Remove the comma
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Moreover
, in 2004, agriculture was not only limited to olives, fruit and vegetables were also
planted for the hotel's use.
In conclusion, due to
this
development, the population also
increased becoming 80000 and 50000 tourist beds. Lastly
, the boats and the harbour are replaced with beaches.Submitted by mh.amani on
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