The diagrams below show the development of small fishing village its surrounding area into a large European tourist resort.

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The diagram illustrates the changes that occurred in a small fishing

village

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and its surrounding area and transformed it into a large European tourist resort.

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, so many things changed in

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area from buildings arriving to the population. Looking into more details, in 1974,the fishing

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was directly surrounded by olives, woodland behind it there was

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a small

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, a

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with sheep and goats was located in the far north of the fishing

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. Now moving to 2004, the fishing

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flourished with hotels

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and beaches, and it remained to contain homes of locals.

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, a new road has been constructed west of the

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, leading to the neighbouring

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, which stopped using sheep and goats.

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road leads

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to the far mountains. The woodland was replaced by a golf course, and it became surrounded by hotels and several buildings in front of the beach. The

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behind it

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contains now tourist shops.

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, in 2004, agriculture was not only limited to olives, fruit and vegetables were

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planted for the hotel's use. In conclusion,

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this

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development, the population

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increased becoming 80000 and 50000 tourist beds.

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, the boats and the harbour are replaced with beaches.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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4 paragraphs

206 words

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The diagrams below show the development of small fishing village its surrounding area into a large European tourist resort.

We live in a world of technology these days. While the internet brings with it clear advantages, the problem in terms of control and security of information outweighs the advantages. To what extent do you agree?

Today, people in many countries can live and work anywhere they choose, because of improved communication technology and transport. Do the advantages of this phenomenon outweigh the it’s disadvantages?

Some cities have few control over design and construction on housing and office buildings. People think that they are free to choose the design they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

You have a just won two tickets to a concert and want to invite your friend to go with you. Write letter to your friend. In the letter: Give details about the concert Describe how you won the tickets Explain why you've chosen your friend to go with you