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Traffic congestion is becoming increasingly problematic in major cities. What solutions can you suggest to help solve this problem?

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Major cities throughout the world are beset by a similar problem, massive
traffic
 congestion. From Washington DC to Paris, key cities in both developed and developing countries place great importance on the reduction of congested roads.
This
 essay proposes feasible solutions that can serve as a means of tackling
traffic
 jams. The most effective measure has to do with public
transport
. In many parts of the world,
this
 is inconvenient or too expensive for
people
 on a limited budget, which means many
people
 still prefer to drive their own cars rather than commute by bus, train or underground. Reducing the cost of public transportation and making it a convenient form of
transport
,
for example
 by ensuring that buses link to key stations and run late enough each day, will entice
people
 back onto public
transport
 systems. Given that buses and trains carry a large number of
people
 in a limited space, unlike private vehicles, the dominance of public
transport
 over automobiles can combat congestion. Another way to prompt
people
 to leave their cars at home is by increasing taxes on driving. Charging high taxes on parking and petrol would not only deter individuals from taking private vehicles but
also
 bring in revenue to improve the road infrastructure, fund cycling paths, and establish better underground railway systems,
thus
 promoting road safety and reducing
traffic
 congestion.
However
, before making travel by car difficult, it is important to offer an integrated public
transport
 system that enables
people
 to travel as conveniently and safely as they do by car. As soon as the government provides citizens with a high-quality public
transport
 system and imposes heavy taxes on driving, it will become possible to deal with the increasing problems associated with
traffic
.
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