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Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Currently, almost all governments around the world set a fixed
retirement
age
 for everyone in every profession, usually about 65 years. It is argued that
this
 is unfair when some employees want to have an early
retirement
.
Due to
 the different requirements of each occupation, I totally believe that we should have more options in choosing when we want to retire. First of all, there should be an earlier
retirement
age
 for physical
labor
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labour
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 jobs. With
this
 type of work, people usually suffer
with
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from
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 negative health effects
due to
 the work environment which takes a toll on their ability to continue working. As in the case of people who come down with an illness and
they
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are forced to retire before the required
age
,
then
 they may not be eligible to receive a pension. Even if we do not consider the previous scenario, we still should respect someone’s wish to retire early. Especially, when they had proven their consideration
into
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 the matter.
Moreover
, the government should allow for later
retirement
 for a white-collar occupation.
In particular
, teachers or college professors are all professions that require years of experience which
make
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makes
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 their
age
 an asset rather than a liability. Many are still very healthy even in their seventies and beyond which
allow
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allows
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 them to keep working well after
the
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retirement
 ages. With
this
 fact, we should let people share their expertise by increasing the
retirement
age
 for these jobs. All in all, we can see that different professionals will have different views on their time for
retirement
. The government should take
this
 into account and create a more flexible approach that allows for the more physically demanding jobs to have their post-work year start at a younger
age
 and,
on the contrary
, for the intellectuals to continue working later in life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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