Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Currently, almost all governments around the world set a fixed

retirement

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age

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for everyone in every profession, usually about 65 years. It is argued that

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is unfair when some employees want to have an early

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the different requirements of each occupation, I totally believe that we should have more options in choosing when we want to retire. First of all, there should be an earlier

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age

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for physical

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jobs. With

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type of work, people usually suffer

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negative health effects

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the work environment which takes a toll on their ability to continue working. As in the case of people who come down with an illness and

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are forced to retire before the required

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they may not be eligible to receive a pension. Even if we do not consider the previous scenario, we still should respect someone’s wish to retire early. Especially, when they had proven their consideration

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the matter.

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, the government should allow for later

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for a white-collar occupation.

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, teachers or college professors are all professions that require years of experience which

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their

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an asset rather than a liability. Many are still very healthy even in their seventies and beyond which

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them to keep working well after

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ages. With

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fact, we should let people share their expertise by increasing the

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for these jobs. All in all, we can see that different professionals will have different views on their time for

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. The government should take

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into account and create a more flexible approach that allows for the more physically demanding jobs to have their post-work year start at a younger

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and,

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, for the intellectuals to continue working later in life.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

300 words

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