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The growth of online shopping will onday clos lead to all shops in town and cities clossing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #onday #clos #shops #town #cities
Undoubtedly,the use of technology has been increasing significantly since
last
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 decade.It has
seen
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,
the
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that
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 online shopping is hiked and having
this
,there might be a chance to
shutdown
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shut down
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the local
bussiness
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business
.In my opinion,Customers are more efficient and confident to
purchage
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purchase
 the
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
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 at the shopping
center
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centre
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 because they get
privilege
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the privilege
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 to select
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the
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proper
size
 and colour choice.
Now a days
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,People are very much busy at their
jobside
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job site
Jobsite
.They get hardly sufficient time to do shopping during working days.The buyer
get
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chance
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a chance
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 to sit in front of the computer after the office and
along
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accomplish the other responsibilities,It is
eassy
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easy
 to busy the required
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
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 online at home.It
is not only save
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does not only save
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the
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time but
also
 save
the
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transport cost ,taxes,establishment cost added, marketing
excuitives
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executives
 and sales person's
salery
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salary
 against the
purchage
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purchase
.
On the other hand
,I
belive
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believe
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 that going to a shopping
center
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centre
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,
it
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apply
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 allows the
purchager
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purchaser
 to check the quality of the material ,
required
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the required
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 perfect
size
,colour selection of the
manufacture
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manufacturer
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.It is a great satisfaction
of
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for
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 the
consumer
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consumer's
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 total sum.
This
 can be a clear example of it.
Last
 time my friend booked a pair of
shoe
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shoes
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online
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in which
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which
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the
size
 no was 13. It was a branded company product.He was excited to
recieve
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receive
 the parcel.After
arrival
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the arrival
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 of the
purchage
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purchase
,
it
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they
he
she
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found
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was found
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 that
this
 pair of
shoe
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shoes
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 would not fit
in
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his feet.All his excitement went to vain. In Conclusion,it cannot be denied that
the
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online shopping gives a comfortable price,
however
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,however
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 I
belive
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believe
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 that visiting
at
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a mall or local business gives more reliable
manifacture
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manufacture
 material and proper
size
 and customer choice first preferences.
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