The charts below show what uk graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what uk graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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The chart represents the data of UK graduates and post-graduates who don't prefer to work full time after leaving college in 2008. A clear analysis of the table reveals that most of the qualified and undergraduate children like to continue
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study after excluding full-time effort.
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with, the ratio of
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study is greater, relative to other fields.
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, most of the students animus voluntary jobs (3500). No children in part-time performance and unemployment are (16,235 to 17,735). The amount of one and the other is very similar for Uk degree holders.
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, the proportion of part-time production rises slightly as compared to the recipient.
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, part-time work and
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studies wisely increase, up to 2725 to 2535. Considerably, unemployment is the third highest (1625).
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, voluntary performance witnessed a decline with a rate of 345. In both ,graphs most of the students like to do high study as compared to other fields.
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