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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.

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 George, I am writing to express my interest in working at our company's headquarters in the United States for a few months to polish my skills and get exposure to the global market trends of our products so that I can better contribute to our company and carry out my responsibilities more efficiently. As you know, I have been recently promoted to Senior Product Manager and I am working hard to collaborate with the team to boost sales and increase our brand reputation.
However
, I have been feeling the need to meet our global team members and attend some training sessions that our head office in San Jose arranges frequently. I am quite positive that the opportunity to work in our company’s head office for six months will
further
 elevate my knowledge about our products and the global market. I have talked to Derek and he has agreed to take up my responsibilities and cover for me during my absence.
Furthermore
, I will check my emails daily, and be available for emergency phone calls. Once I get back to the office, I would endeavour to work extra hours in order to catch up on things I have missed. It would be great if I could get your approval and help to arrange my transfer so that I can work in the headquarters and fulfil the objectives. I look forward to your positive reply. Yours sincerely, Charles Hugo
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