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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
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A glance at the first chart provided reveals the percentage of consumption of
energy
 in
Australian
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household
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households
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.
Meanwhil
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Meanwhile
,
other
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 chart illustrates the amount of
emmision
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emission
 of
greennhouse
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greenhouse
 gasses in
Australian
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an Australian
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household
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households
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.
According to
 the chart,heating and water heating are the major
energy
 uses in Australia with 42% and 30 % respectively.One important point
that
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highlighted
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 by the figure is that
,
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the emissino
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emissino
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emission
emissions
 of gas for
heating
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the heating
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 part is 15%
that
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 is half of the amount of
energy
 that they
use
.As it is clear, other appliances
use
 15% of
consumption
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the consumption
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 of
energy
.
In contrast
,the percentage of gas
emmision
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emission
emissions
are
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 two times bigger than
amount
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the amount
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 of its
use
. Cooling,lighting,
refrigeration
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and refrigeration
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 constitute other reasons how
Australian
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Australians
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use
energy
.cooling and lighting
ave
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have
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 striking similarities in their trends with 2% and 4%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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