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The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart show the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart show the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two graphs describe the proportion of housework and the average amount of
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 doing it between two sex men and women in 5 distinct chores namely cooking, cleaning, pet care, and house repairs.
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, it can be clearly seen that females overtake males in cooking and cleaning in
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 two charts; whilst, males hold a higher percentage and
time
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 looking after their pets and repairing the house. Looking at the chart in more detail, the proportion of females who take care of cooking and cleaning keep over 80% and over 60% respectively, which is higher than that of the male by 21% in
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 cooking and cleaning.
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, males keep their house repaired by nearly 20%, which doubled that of females. There is
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 a similar figure between pet care of
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 sexes, with men’s proportion on looking after their pets only higher than that of women’s 1%. The average
time
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 doing chores shows the same trend as the percentage of doing it in
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 sexes.
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 cooking and cleaning in the figures of women still hold the higher percentage with 85 and 68 minutes in turn, men’s
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 spent on cooking and cleaning only hold 60 and 45 minutes respectively.
Time
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 spent on looking after their pet in
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 sexes is the same, which is 20 minutes.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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