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The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.

#crime #rate #teenagers #countries
The above bar chart illustrates the most
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 takeaways for food in Canada.
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 in Canada in the different years.The bar chart is calibrated in percentage. The two most demanding cuisine for takeaway in Canada is Chinese and
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26% respectively.the following popular take away for canadian people was greek(11%),Italian(10%) and persian(9%).Thai and
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 accounted for 3% and 4% respectively.
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 food style Mexican and other accounted for only 1% Regarding The
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resturant
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restaurants
 in canda is very less approximately 50 in the starting year 1960.
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increased
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to
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almost 9000
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year
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 2015. A clear relation is manifested between the
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of indian
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indian
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resturant
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restaurants
 and the demand
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Indian
 food for
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.To be precise, having
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number
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resturant
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restaurant
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 people
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choose
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 foods.
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