Some people think that schools should focus on academic subjects like algebra, history, and physics, but others think that schools should spend time focusing on practical skills like time management and banking. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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system has always been a subject of discussion. There has been a lot of debate going on
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schools should focus on academic subjects or on practical skills. In
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I will be disputing the beliefs of both sides and expressing my thoughts about
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issue.
Firstly
, academic subjects like history, biology, or physics
helps
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help
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to learn more about our world,
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way it functions.
For example
, biology is a great subject which can help to spread awareness about our environment and body itself -
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provides young people with
informacion
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information
about issues in the natural world like global warming, deforestation or endangered species and why it is important to understand what harm it is causing and how it can be decreased. Being educated about the human body can destigmatize bodily functions,
prevent
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illnesses and similar points around
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matter. Academic subjects may not be super useful in everyday
life
but it makes a huge difference in the long run. Second of all, practical skills, like time management, banking or communication and teamwork, are
also
essential in
day to day
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life
and school is a great place to practice and improve at it.
This
type of experience is required in almost all jobs
as well as
communicational abilities - we ought to socialize
due to
the fact that we are surrounded by others most of the time.
For instance
, time management is crucial for everyone,
this
expertise is improved by practice
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real
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real-life
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life
situations. All in all, I think that both views are equally important and should be
practiced
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evenly. Academic and practical skills are needed to educate a person variously and prepare them for different
life
or work situations.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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