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Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising children and less on their working life. To what extents do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#women #childcare #men #focus #children #life #extents
There seems to be a common agreement that
women
 are better at taking care of children compared to
men
 and
thus
 they should put more time and energy into baby
caring
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. I totally disagree with
this
 statement and I believe that
women
 should be viewed equally with
men
 in work and life scare. It is easy to understand why many people hold the view that
women
 are bound to take on more household duties. On one hand ,it is partly influenced by the tradition of China that when
men
 go out to hunt for food and earn money,
women
 mostly take care of children and elders or do some fabrications. Even now,our society is holding
this
 ridiculous point more or less
,
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and does not count on
women
on
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 some big family affairs.
On the other hand
,
men
 are to be obliged
due to
 the lack of responsibilities
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 child caring ,posing much pressure on their wives, which not only harms their bodies
,
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 but
also
destorys
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destroys
women
's careers. I completely believe that
women
 should pursue what they want freely either a close baby relationship or giant work achievements. With civilization progressing, it is time to give equality between
women
 and
men
, mother and father. Only when both of them make their biggest effort , society can get
further
 and balanced development. What's more, it is recognized that
women
 are more excel in some areas than
men
 ,
such
 as guiding and consulting, as they give the needers a sense of belief and safety. If mothers put nearly every effort into babies and families, it will result in a big waste of gifts and talents of them. Regarding
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the division of childcare, I think it should be completely discussed in the family and adopt a reasonable method with guarantees both work and responsibilities for
chidren
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children
. In conclusion,
while
women
 seem to be better at child raring, it is both sides' responsibility on the topic of
this
 and mothers should have the right to decide whether they are at home or in
workplace
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