Employer should focus on personal qualities over qualifications and experienced when choosing someone for a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?
In today's modern world, in many societies, focusing on visual
qualities
instead
of qualifications
and experiences to hire one as an employee has become widely common.In this
regard, I strongly disagree with this
point for a number of reasons which will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
One of the important reasons that employers
should choose an individual for a job
based on personal qualifications
is that experienced people
have self-esteem and confidence because they are educated before
. Rephrase
apply
In addition
, people
with qualifications
and experienced communities are able to deal with difficulties in a job
.Furthermore
, when employers
hire experienced workers,they do not need to spend their time and
energy or even money on training them.Correct word choice
apply
Moreover
, employers
with finding
experienced and qualified individuals are not at risk in their businesses.Wrong verb form
find
For example
, when teachers are hired in high school with some experience
, they can cope with some difficulties among boys and girls.
On the other hand
, some employers
prefer to focus on personal qualities
to choosing employers
.They claim that Society needs to have young workers.They should be trained based on personal qualities
and enter the job
market.Moreover
, some employers
prefer to not choose experienced people
because their salaries are more
than others. Correct word choice
higher
For example
, In my country , the salary for people
without experience
is one of a third of people
with experience
.Further
, they believe that experienced people
may be retired in the following years and their businesses would be stopped.Thus
, they prefer to find a person with personal qualities
that are close to their jobs and train them to have a successful business.
In conclusion, for a number of reasons mentioned above ,In my opinion, people
with experience
and qualifications
would be better for hiring for every job
.Submitted by saraseifi2016 on
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task response
The essay partially addresses the prompt by discussing the importance of personal qualifications and experience in hiring. However, it lacks a clear position on whether personal qualities should be favored over qualifications and experience.
coherence and cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is somewhat clear, but there are some inconsistencies and lack of coherence between ideas. The introduction and conclusion are present, but they could be more focused and impactful.