Many people opine that all university students should study whatever they like, whereas some people think the university should teaching some subjects that only related to science and technology for students. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

One of the most controversial issues around the world is education.Meanwhile,some people think,
students
should select their
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study whatever
they like.but,the second group believe,they should learn the lessons that
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are useful and beneficial for their future.I strongly believe
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students
should learn subjects that they are interested in.In
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I will discuss both
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with some examples and I will give my opinion. On one hand,some people think,
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have to right to
study
whatever they want.The reason is that
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students
should find their interest because every person to an extent
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aware of
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talent and they want to select their own subject in the university.
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a
field
of
study
not only help them to increase their
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self-esteem
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but only help them to enhance their motivation.
In addition
,they have more
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to be successful and find better
job
opportunities for their future
job
.It is well-established fact that
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the
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of
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happiness
and satisfaction in
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are bigger than
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other
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others
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and they
also
have more incentive to do their own
job
.
On the other hand
,some people who believe children or
student
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students
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should
study
lesson
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lessons
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such
as science have some reasons.They think
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students
can not distinguish between wrong and right and they should select
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fields
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of
study
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related to science,technology and
other practical
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another practical field
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field
.If
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students
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,first of all,have no tendency to their lesson and their
field
they may abandon university or college midway and it will harm
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their
job
opportunities and their future
job
chance.In one survey that asked
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from
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of many different
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jobs
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,most of the
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mentioned
job
satisfaction and
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happiness
in their
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the biggest motivation for them. To
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sum up
,
students
have to right to follow their dreams.the best way to help them is
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guide
them.Parents or teachers should encourage them to find out their
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talent
an
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their intelligence and they should be the best mentor and
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for
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to gain the desired result.
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