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The maps show the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Write a report of at least 150 words, summarizing the main features and making comparison where relevant.

The maps show the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Write a report of at least 150 words, summarizing the main features and making comparison where relevant.
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The two maps illustrate how the town of Stokeford was planned to be developed over
a
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 80-year period.
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, there were several developments of buildings, facilities and roads which would be built during 80 years time.
According to
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 the picture, in the year
1930
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 there was farmland with many cows on the east side of the primary school and on the
south west
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southwest
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 of
a gardens
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gardens
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. There were
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 two shops next to a post office, a small garden and a large house in the southeast area. There were plans to reconstruct
this
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 town in the next 80 years.
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, the Farmland on the east and on the west area would be replaced by a road.
On the other hand
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, the primary school was made bigger than before. Some shops were removed and created a new road. In the
south-east
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area
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 a garden and a large house were remodelled into a retirement home .
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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