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A “cashless society” is one where people use debit/credit cards and other forms of payment. Do the advantages of a cashless society outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the contemporary era,technology
increasingly
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 popular and
delovep
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deliver
beloved
 to
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the masses
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masses
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 daily life.
Also
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 people
trend
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tend
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 to
use
 more convenient
way
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ways
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 to check out any transaction in their usual.
Hence
,
cashless
 become a trend
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nowadays.Some argue that
cashless
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a cashless
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 society will cause a larger number
problems
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 ,
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while other
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other
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others
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 debates
that
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have
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benefits over drawbacks. In my opinion,I totally
agree
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 the latter statement and I will explain. First of all,
cashless
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 society occurred before a
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decade
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.During these ten years
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period
,
cashless
user
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users
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 increased steadily.
However
 ,including
majority
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the majority
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 of my friends and
families
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family
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.These special payment methods make their life more easily. They would just wear the watch or bring the phone ,
then
 would pay in any supermarket.
Additionally
,just download the apps ,
also
 one button
press
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other
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 side will receive money directly,
such
use
 PayMe ,Alipay or other payment apps.
Moreover
,
cashless
 should avoid some artificial mistakes.
For instance
, I never
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 my wallet to
supermarket
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the supermarket
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 as my phone completely
instead
it
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This
E wallet
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 seems
become
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 my partner in my daily life. On the other
hands
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, some
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 that online security problems. Some hackers would
easy
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 break security protects and
stoken
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stolen
 personal information.They will
illegal
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illegally
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use
 these
ID
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IDs
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,
credit
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and credit
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 card
number
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numbers
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.
Hence
, folks will cause huge damage. In conclusion,I believe the advantage
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 and
cashless
 still rose steadily in
next
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the next
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 decade ,
also
provide
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 various services to suitable different generations
people
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of people
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.
However
,We need to
use
 our information prudent
while
 we enjoy
advance
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 technology.
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