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The table shows the numbers of people in each group working in certain sectors in the UK in 1998 and 2006

The table shows the numbers of people in each group working in certain sectors in the UK in 1998 and 2006
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The table gives information on the total
number
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 of
people
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 in five different
age
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 groups (ranging from 18 to 65 years old) who worked in four different sectors (hotel and catering, building,
technology
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, and
education
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) in the UK between 1998 and 2006.
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, in 1998, the majority of
people
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 the 46-55 who were employed in the
education
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 field were the highest
number
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,
while
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 the oldest
age
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 group chose
technology
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, becoming the lowest
number
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 in 1998.
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, in 2000,
education
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 was the most preferable job and the biggest
number
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 that workers at
age
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 26-35 decided to
do
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.
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, the oldest
people
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 who accompanied the building sector were the smallest
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. It is noticeable that in 1998 the total of citizens at
age
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 46-55 working in the
education
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 sector was the highest around 125,345
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this
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number
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 decreased for the oldest
age
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 group. But, in
this
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 year,
technology
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 became the lowest
number
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 that the oldest
people
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 choose to do as their job, about 800. Other sectors including hotel and catering and building in
this
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 year experienced a decrease in numbers through the increasing
age
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 of
people
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. In 2000, there were changes in the sectors that
people
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 preferred to do. Citizens at
age
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 26-35 who have an occupation in
technology
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 were the largest
number
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 approximately 454,375. Contrary to the building field, reaching the smallest
number
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, that was just around 3,287
people
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 choosing
this
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 job.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, age, technology, education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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