The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children’s sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period.

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The line graphs illustrate the average amount of money invested in British children's sports each month by their parents and how many children took part in sporting activities from 2008 to 2014.

Overall

it is clear that

the monthly expenditure on sports experienced an upward trend and football was the highest compared to the others two.

According to

the given pictures, in 2008 parents allocated £20 each month for children's sports purposes. For the next four years, it rose moderately to £25 in 2012 and £27 in 2014, respectively. By 2014, it had risen significantly to £32.

Additionally

, in 2008 football was the favourite one accounting for 8

million

On the other hand

, swimming and athletics started at 2

million

and a half, respectively.

Then

, In 2011, the number of swimming was as same as athletics at 2

million

and a half. Interestingly, in 2012 when soccer slightly rise to 8,5

million

after a year flattered, athletics reached a peak of 5

million

, surpassing swimming which had 4

million

participants

at the end

of the period of time.

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The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children’s sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period.

Some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do anything. Others believe that men and women are not equal and therefore are certain jobs which are not suitable for women. What is your opinion?

Some people think that intelligence is innate, while others think that we can improve our intelligence through learning. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Too much emphasis is given for education of the young. More government money should be spent to free time activities of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that it is good idea to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valued to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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