The graph below shows the percentage of workers from five different European countries that were absent for a day or more due to illness from 1991 to 2001.Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of workers from five different European countries that were absent for a day or more due to illness from 1991 to 2001.Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph depicts the ratio of employees who are unavailable to work in a ten-year period from the
Netherlands
,
France
,
Sweden
, the
UK
and
Germany
.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen from the graph that
Sweden
,
Netherlands
and
France
had a significant fluctuation
while
UK
and
Germany
remained slightly changed. Glancing at the chart reveals that in the first three-year, the
Netherlands
had a remarkable growth with under 5.00 in 1991
then
rose to approximately 5.50 in 1993
while
France
,
Sweden
and
UK
increased marginally with about 5.10; 3.10 and 2.40 respectively.
Next,
the percentage of employees in
France
surpassed the proportion of workers in
Sweden
with about 4.20 in 1993
then
dropped drastically to 3.20 in 1996 for
France
and 3.00 gained negligibly to 3.20 for
Sweden
. Another notable point is that the
Netherlands
had dramatically fallen from 5.50 to 4.20 in 1993 and 1996
while
UK
and
Germany
remained unchanged.
Subsequently
,
Netherlands
and
Sweden
had significant climbs with 4.2 and 3.2 to 5.4 and 4.7 respectively
at the end
of the survey.
Sweden
,
UK
and
Germany
had a slight fluctuation in the next five-year period.
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