The use of corporal punishment (physically hitting students) in schools is in decline, yet it should be used to improve behaviour. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The graph shows us
percentage
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the percentage
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of
people
were
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who were
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born in
Australia
and who were born outside
Australia
living in urban, rural and
town
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towns
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between 1995 and 2010.
First
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The first
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chats
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chat
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is about
people
, who were born in
Australia
. The Brown line reaches close to 50 per
cent
and means
percentage
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the percentage
a percentage
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of
people
, who were born in
city
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the city
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.
Then
chart
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the chart
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drops to 20 per
cent
on
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in
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the yellow range and describes a
persons
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person
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who were born in towns. Next is blue
that
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which
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is about guys, who were born in rural areas. There is the second rage, as we can see he is a little different. It is about
people
who were born outside
Australia
. From cities
are
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60 per
cent
of
people
, from towns
are
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15 per
cent
and from rural areas
are
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40 per
cent
. Let’s come to 2010 indicators. The first line shows 65
per
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cent
,
yellow
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the yellow
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and blue lines are
same
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the same
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and
reaches
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reach
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nearly
to
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apply
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15 %. Well, the “
People
born outside
Australia
in 2010” graph. As in the second range,
brown
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the brown
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line goes to 60 %,
than
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then
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yellow is 10 and blue is 5 per
cent
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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