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Unemployment remains the biggest challenge to school-leavers in most countries’ How far do you agree with this assessment? What other challenges face young people today?

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In recent decades, youth unemployment has become the most challenging aspect in many nations around the world. In my perspective, I partly agree with
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prejudice
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against
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school-leavers
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 still exists;
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, there are other factors which affect
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 status of young
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society.
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, the stereotype
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 they are not socially responsible
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 exacerbates the failure of getting job opportunities because of a lack of a certificate from school curriculums.
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, it is significantly prevalent in the global society, regarding
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 as problematic individuals.
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, I somehow argue that the circumstance is comparatively possible to overcome by self-development through
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 scheme.
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 as dancers or singers were able to be educated by a private instructor, not school teachers.
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social prejudice affects their unemployment status, but, it can be possibly overcome as long as they desire.
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, it is true that young
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 encounter several social problems, leading to early resignation in most countries.
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 systems which are too much leaning on fundamental subjects cause youths to lose sustainability in workplaces. As they are certainly short of social abilities
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 as communication skills, and the ability to adapt
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 hierarchy,
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 phenomenon of employment results in
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 resignation of the youths. Another reason is that
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 a shortage of infrastructure
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 as vocational institutions, the shortage of
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opportunities to learn actual work performance lead to
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 significant number of young job seekers.
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, the intervention of governments to support young
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's social issues is required to improve the situation. In conclusion, to solve the problems,
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society and young
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 need to make an effort to resolve the prejudice and to improve themselves. Somehow,
governments
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 assistance is necessary to provide vocational programs.
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