Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, many
countries
are still developing countries
and rely on the
rich Correct article usage
apply
countries
by gaining money
from them. However
, this
method can't solve poverty
problem. Add an article
the poverty
I'm agree
with that point. Change the verb form
I agree
The developed
Correct article usage
Developed
countries
should give other types of help to the poor countries
rather than financial aid
. There are several reasons support
my Fix the infinitive
to support
poinion
.
First of all, the poorer Correct your spelling
opinion
countries
has
many problems. It means only Change the verb form
have
money
can not solve all problems. If the wealthy countries
still support them
Change the pronoun
their
financial
Change preposition
with financial
aid
. They will not develop themselves because they used to gain money
easily to solve their people
life but don't fix their problems. So the most important thing is education. The wealthy Change noun form
people's
countries
should help the poorer countries
by give
them Change the verb form
giving
knowleage
to manage their Correct your spelling
knowledge
resourses
. It will help them develop their Correct your spelling
resources
countries
methodically.
Morover
, I suggest every Correct your spelling
Moreover
countries
have Change to a singular noun
country
their
unique points. Many Correct pronoun usage
its
countries
have own
beautiful Correct pronoun usage
their own
view
and Fix the agreement mistake
views
tranditional
Correct your spelling
traditional
festival
. Announcing their Fix the agreement mistake
festivals
tranditional
tourist attractions Correct your spelling
traditional
help
them make Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
money
and cause cultural exchange. Beside
, it may discover lost Replace the word
Besides
accient
civilization.
Correct your spelling
ancient
However
, the
financial Correct article usage
apply
aid
is still needed. Therefore
, the
developing must have Correct article usage
apply
money
. The rich country can give them money
in many
Correct your spelling
any
way
for maximum benefits. Change to a plural noun
ways
For example
, the
can give Correct your spelling
they
scholarship
for their student to study abroad under conditions that after finished they have to come back Fix the agreement mistake
scholarships
their
own Change preposition
to their
countries
.
In conclusion, I absolutely agree that the
developed Correct article usage
apply
countries
should give types of help to the
poor Correct article usage
apply
countries
rather than financial aid
. Nevertheless
, the
financial Correct article usage
apply
aid
is still needed but used in conjunction with other methods.Submitted by d.ritthison on
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