Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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should give other types of help to the poor

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rather than financial

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many problems. It means only

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can not solve all problems. If the wealthy

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still support

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easily to solve their

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life but don't fix their problems. So the most important thing is education. The wealthy

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should help the poorer

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unique points. Many

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and cause cultural exchange.

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can give

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for their student to study abroad under conditions that after finished they have to come back

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developed

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should give types of help to

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poor

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rather than financial

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financial

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is still needed but used in conjunction with other methods.

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

poverty alleviation
economic inequality
developing nations
foreign aid
sustainable growth
technical assistance
expertise
infrastructure
education
fair trade
trade barriers
sustainable development
environmental conservation

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