Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, many
countries
are still developing
countries
and rely on
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rich
countries
by gaining
money
from them.
However
,
this
method can't solve
poverty
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the poverty
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problem.
I'm agree
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with that point.
The developed
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Developed
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countries
should give other types of help to the poor
countries
rather than financial
aid
. There are several reasons
support
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my
poinion
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opinion
. First of all, the poorer
countries
has
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have
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many problems. It means only
money
can not solve all problems. If the wealthy
countries
still support
them
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their
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financial
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with financial
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aid
. They will not develop themselves because they used to gain
money
easily to solve their
people
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life but don't fix their problems. So the most important thing is education. The wealthy
countries
should help the poorer
countries
by
give
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them
knowleage
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knowledge
to manage their
resourses
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resources
. It will help them develop their
countries
methodically.
Morover
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Moreover
, I suggest every
countries
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country
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have
their
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its
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unique points. Many
countries
have
own
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their own
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beautiful
view
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views
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and
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traditional
festival
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festivals
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. Announcing their
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traditional
tourist attractions
help
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helps
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them make
money
and cause cultural exchange.
Beside
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, it may discover lost
accient
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ancient
civilization.
However
,
the
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financial
aid
is still needed.
Therefore
,
the
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developing must have
money
. The rich country can give them
money
in
many
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any
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way
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ways
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for maximum benefits.
For example
,
the
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they
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can give
scholarship
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scholarships
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for their student to study abroad under conditions that after finished they have to come back
their
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to their
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own
countries
. In conclusion, I absolutely agree that
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developed
countries
should give types of help to
the
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poor
countries
rather than financial
aid
.
Nevertheless
,
the
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financial
aid
is still needed but used in conjunction with other methods.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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