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Traffic congestion is a growing problem in many cities today, what are some of the causes of traffic congestion, and what measures can be taken to help reduce it.

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Nowadays, a plethora of
people
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 in the city tend to purchase new private cars rather than
use
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 public
transportation
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,
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this
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which
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 might cause
traffic
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congestion
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.
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, the government should take some policies to reduce
this
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 issue, which will be elaborated
in
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 the following paragraph.
Traffic
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congestion
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 often occurs in the city,
due to
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 the fact that a large number of societies tend to buy new vehicles in order to make their activities easier and safe.
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,
people
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 avoid
to
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using
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use
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 public
transportation
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 because it may create some
risks
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risky
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 activities for passengers,
such
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 as sexual harassment, theft, and
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a robber
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robber
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robbery
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.
Therefore
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, in many
cities
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,cities
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 public
transportation
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 is designed without any proper facilities for the passengers.
Subsequently
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,
traffic
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 jams in the city occur because of lack of
space
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 or lines on the
road
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,
,
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apply
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meanwhile
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,meanwhile
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 the
use
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 of private cars is rising during the year.
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, when
people
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 are trapped in
traffic
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congestion
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, they can not choose any option
road
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. The most effective solution to overcome these issues
are
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is
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 through taking several regulations by policymakers. First of all, the government should improve the quality of public
transportation
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 by adding several facilities
on
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to
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 public
transportation
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,
such
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 as Air conditioning, security, and CCTV.
This
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 might create comfort for passengers, and it may increase the number of citizens to
use
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 public
transportation
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. Following these steps, adding
space
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 or line on the
road
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 is the appropriate solution to
this
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,
hence
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;
people
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 can choose many options
of
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for
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road
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the road
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 when they are trapped in
the
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apply
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traffic
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congestion
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. In conclusion, in many metropolitan areas,
traffic
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congestion
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 is the main issue today, because many societies enjoy the
use
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 of private vehicles and lack of
space
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 or line on the
road
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.
Nevertheless
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, adding many facilities and
space
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/ lines are solutions that should be taken by the government.
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