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average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

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A glance at the graph provided reveals the
amount
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 of emissions of carbon dioxide per person in 4 different countries between 1967 and 2007.
According to
 the graph,the amount of
emmision
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emission
 of CO2 in
United
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the United
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 kingdom has steadily decreased from 11 metric
tonnes
 per person in 1967 to about 9 metric
tonnes
 in2007.Meanwhile,
average
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of
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emission of carbon dioxide in Sweden has fluctuated.It began from just more than 8
tonnes
 in 1967 and it reached
at
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a
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 peak somewhere in the vicinity of 10
tonnes
 in 1977 and
then
has
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sharp
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 plunged to just
low
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a low
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 of 6
tonnes
 in 2007. As it is clear,Italy and Portugal had striking similarities in their trends.The amount of
emmision
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emission
 of Co2 in Both countries had
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an increase
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increase
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 in their patterns.Portugal
had
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rose
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 from less than 2
tonnes
 in 1967 to
near
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nearly
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 6
tonnes
 in 2007.Sweden
also
,had
slightly
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rose
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 during these years from about 4
tonnes
 per person to about 8
tonnes
 in 2007.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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