average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

A glance at the graph provided reveals the amount of carbon dioxide produced per person in four different countries between 1967 and 2007.
According to
the graph,the amount of
emission
of CO2 in the United
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has always been higher than
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countries between 1967 and 2007.The average was about 11 metric
tonnes
per person in 1967 and it had marginally
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to
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9 metric
tonnes
in 2007.Meanwhile,the
emission
of CO2 in Sweden had some fluctuations.It was more than 8
tonnes
in 1967 and
then
reached
peak
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at about 10 in 1977 and
then
it had
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plunge to just
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of 6
tonnes
metric in2007. As it is clear,the average
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emission
of CO2 in Italy and Portugal had striking similarities in their trends.Both countries had
steadly
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during these decades.Portugal,
in addition
,had a minimum of
emission
of carbon dioxide during
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during
these years between about 1
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to about 5
tonnes
in 1967 and 2007 respectively. One particular point that
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by the figure is that
,
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the output of CO2 in Portugal and Sweden reached about 5
tonnes
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eachother
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each other
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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