Some people think that museum should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while believe that the purpose of museum is to educate Discuss both views and discuss your opinion ?

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Few
people
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believe that
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museum
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is
location
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for enjoying their
time
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,
while
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others believe
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museum
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a museum
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is
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an education
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education
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place. Some
of
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museums
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the museums
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have good
design
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and modern
architecture
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,
also
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people
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get
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lot
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of
information
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by visiting
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the museum
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museum
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museums
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. On the one hand, some
people
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visiting
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visit
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the museum
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museum
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museums
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just for enjoying their
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. it is normal
,
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because some
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museum
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museums
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have
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a
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apply
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aesthetic
architecture
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and good
design
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. They come to
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the museum
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museum
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museums
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just
for
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to
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take a picture or appreciate
painting
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a painting
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or sculpture without
know
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knowing
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about the background knowledge of it. Like in
art
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an art
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museum
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,
people
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come to appreciate the art,
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furthermore
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young
people
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have
new
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a new
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term for
couple
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a couple
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come
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coming
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to the
museum
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, it
call
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museum
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date”. So, some
people
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believe
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museum
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the museum
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is
very
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a very
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good place for enjoying their
time
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it is normal, because the
design
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, ambience,
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architecture
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and architecture
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is aesthetic and
wort
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worth
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it to
enjoying
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their
time
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.
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, some
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museum
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museums
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have
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lot
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a lot
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of
information
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about
history
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,
culture
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, and art.
Basic
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The basic
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of
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the museum
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museum
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museums
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is
give
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information
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,
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because
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a museum
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museum
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museums
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keep
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keeps
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the important things of
history
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and
culture
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. In Yogyakarta, Yogyakarta’s palace
museum
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keep anything from former king Hamengkubuwono VIII like clothes, weapon, and camera. it
describe
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well by Yogyakarta’s palace. So, the visitor
have
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lot
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of
information
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about
the
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its
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history
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and
culture
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of it. Meanwhile,
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lot
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a lot
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of tour
guide
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guides
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in
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the area,
therefore
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easier for visitor
understanding
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to understand
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history
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the history
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and
culture
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of
Yogayakarta’s
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Yogyakarta’s
palace.
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,
people
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come
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coming
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to
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the museum
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museum
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museums
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for enjoying their
time
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is good because
the
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of the
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aesthetical
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architecture
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, but the historical and cultural
information
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is more important. Knowledge about
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history
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the history
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and anything
museum
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is
important
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rather the
design
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,
cause
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because
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we will get
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lot
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a lot
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of insight after
finish
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finishing
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visiting
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museum
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the museum
a museum
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.
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