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Vehicle number in England and Wales (in million) and the amount of CO2 emission in tonnes. Write about this fo at least 150 words.

#vehicle #england #wales #million #amount #co #emission #tonnes #fo
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The following line graph illustrates the number of
vehicle
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vehicles
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 in both England and Wales,
whereas
 the bar chart presents how much
do
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different vehicles produce CO2 emission in tones between 2000 and 2020.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that vehicle number has been
sharlpy
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sharply
 increasing since 2000 and it continued through the given, period.
Nevertheless
, cars were the most vehicle to produce CO2 in all of the years,
while
 trucks were the least CO2 producers. It is equally important to recognize that all
vehicles
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 rates have been increasing in the amount of CO2 emission. At the beginning of the given, period in the line graph the numbers started from 20 million.
However
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 it grow up until it hit a
peack
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peak
 in 2020 for mostly 60 million.
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