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The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries.

The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries.
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The chart illustrates four different countries and
to report
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 what type of
food
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most
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consumped
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consumed
 by people.
Rice
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,
maize
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, and
wheat
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showed
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shown
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 in the graph
considred
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considered
 as basic foods that people need in their daily meals.
Moreover
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, Cambodia, Poland, Egypt, and Mexico are the countries the study
focus
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focuses
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 on.
To begin
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 with, not all countries consume the same
food
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everyday
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 because it
diffrenetiate
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differentiate
differentiated
differentiates
 from each other.
Rice
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the
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 first category Cambodia was the first country to use it more in their meals reaching 1445
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person
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people
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 per day. As for
wheat
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 and
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maize
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 the numbers averaged 18
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person
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people
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 for
wheat
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103
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and 103
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 for
maize
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.
On the other hand
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, Egypt
take
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wheat
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 as their primary
food
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 achieving 1095
person
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 per day.
While
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rice
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 with 501
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person
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people
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 and 578
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person
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people
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 use
maize
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.
Further
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, Poland
an
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 European country
take
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takes
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wheat
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 as their most
consumption
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food
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 reaching 865 but for
rice
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 and
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maize
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 the total number was shocking. The
rice
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 with 19 and
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Maize
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the Maize
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 0.
Lastly
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, Mexico
have
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the
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apply
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maize
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 as the
prioraty
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priority
 in their table with 1083. for
wheat
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 and
rice
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 mexican do not
used
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 much with 57 and 275.
To conclude
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, the world is not the same and every country uses their traditional
food
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, rice, maize, wheat, person with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • basic foods
  • wheat
  • maize
  • rice
  • countries
  • comparing
  • analyzing
  • trends
  • factors
  • influencing
  • patterns
  • implications
  • health
  • nutrition
  • solutions
  • food security
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