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The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries.

The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries.
#consumption #three #foods #wheat #maize #rice #people #four #countries
The chart illustrates four different countries and
to report
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 what type of
food
most
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is most
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consumped
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consumed
 by people.
Rice
,
maize
, and
wheat
showed
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shown
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 in the graph
considred
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considered
 as basic foods that people need in their daily meals.
Moreover
, Cambodia, Poland, Egypt, and Mexico are the countries the study
focus
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focuses
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 on.
To begin
 with, not all countries consume the same
food
everyday
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 because it
diffrenetiate
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differentiate
differentiated
differentiates
 from each other.
Rice
the
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 first category Cambodia was the first country to use it more in their meals reaching 1445
person
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people
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 per day. As for
wheat
 and
maize
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,maize
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 the numbers averaged 18
person
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people
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 for
wheat
103
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and 103
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 for
maize
.
On the other hand
, Egypt
take
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wheat
 as their primary
food
 achieving 1095
person
 per day.
While
rice
 with 501
person
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people
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 and 578
person
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people
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 use
maize
.
Further
, Poland
an
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 European country
take
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takes
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wheat
 as their most
consumption
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consumed
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food
 reaching 865 but for
rice
 and
maize
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,maize
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 the total number was shocking. The
rice
 with 19 and
Maize
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the Maize
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 0.
Lastly
, Mexico
have
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the
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apply
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maize
 as the
prioraty
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priority
 in their table with 1083. for
wheat
 and
rice
 mexican do not
used
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use
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 much with 57 and 275.
To conclude
, the world is not the same and every country uses their traditional
food
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, rice, maize, wheat, person with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • basic foods
  • wheat
  • maize
  • rice
  • countries
  • comparing
  • analyzing
  • trends
  • factors
  • influencing
  • patterns
  • implications
  • health
  • nutrition
  • solutions
  • food security
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