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Many elderly people are no longer looked after by their families but are put in care homes or nursing homes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Nowadays, a lot of seniors are taken
care
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in
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of in
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care
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 homes and nursing homes rather than in their
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home
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homes
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.
This
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essey
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essay
 will address
about
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this
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 topic and discuss both merits and demerits.
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 with, staying
in
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out of
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home
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the home
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 lessen
familiy
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family
member's
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members'
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burdans
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burdens
burden
 and the pressure from looking after old
people
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's health condition. Even though
family
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 is
closest
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 individual
from
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to
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 the elderly
people
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, there is
limitation
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a limitation
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 that they can handle the situation
at
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in
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same
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the same
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 living place.
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, a senior who has
crucial
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the crucial
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 disease cannot be
controled
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controlled
 by family members who do not have medical
skill
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skills
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;
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, putting old
people
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 who need
a
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care
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 in
facility
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a facility
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 that can support them has
a
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significant value.
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, leaving senior family members to public resources decrease their
comfortability
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 and
worsen
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worsens
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 their medical condition in order to
adopt
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adapt
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new
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a new
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 environment. Especially, if the individual has lived in their
home
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 with their family for
long
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a long
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 time, changing
thier
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their
 place to live
impact
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impacts
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thier
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their
 mental and physical condition.
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, as
matter
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a matter
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 of fact that
a
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 old guy who loved
home
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 and family had to leave the house and started living in
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care
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a care
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home
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 passed away after he moved because he had
stressed
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 out and
not
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was not
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 used to
be
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being
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 in the new environment unfortunately.
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, changing the old
individuals
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individual's
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 environment does not always promote their situation.
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, putting
old
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an old
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 family
member
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members
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 in
medical
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a medical
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care
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facility
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facilities
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 without taking
care
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 at
home
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 has a value which can
alliviate
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alleviate
 the tasks that family members have to
.
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do.
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 Meanwhile, there is
also
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downside
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the downside
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 that might distress the senior
people
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 because of
new
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a new
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 living place without family.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Professional care
  • Medical attention
  • Trained staff
  • Social interaction
  • Combat loneliness
  • Safety and security
  • Relief for families
  • Loss of autonomy
  • Emotional impact
  • Cost
  • Financial strain
  • Quality of care
  • Neglect and abuse
  • Detachment from family
  • Mental wellbeing
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