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Some people think employers should not care about the way employees dress but the quality at work. To what extent do agree or disagree?

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In
this
 contemporary epoch, a number of individuals opine that employers should not care about the way of their
dress
 code,
nonetheless
,the quality at
work
. I deem that wearing
uniform
 and non-
uniform
 codes are equal advantages towards employees
such
 as loyalty, cooperation and so on. To commence with, owning to several reasons that
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, employees not
needs
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 take up dressing sense. Primarily, for feeling relaxed and more concentrated on their
work
. To elaborate,
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a company
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company
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companies
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 like designers or google,
they
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didn't promote
dress
code
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codes
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. So,employees feel more comfortable
while
 doing
a
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work
 on a computer and
the
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 laptop.Along,
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this
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 workers stay focused
toward
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works
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work
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 and access to the productivity of
company
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the company
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.
Furthermore
, some
uniform
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uniforms
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 are not suitable for people
such
 as short dresses, which leads to
unjustices
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injustices
injustice
 towards their
cultural
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 or religion like Hindus and
Muslim
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Muslims
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.
Therefore
, every company has to promote the
useage
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usage
 of
a
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casual
dress
that
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also
,
increase
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 the number of workers.
On the other hand
, there are some aspects that determine,
uniform
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a uniform
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are
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play an important role at
work
. To a greater extent reason is that it leads a loyalty and
a
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cooperation
in
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job
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the job
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. To explain, many jobs required a
uniform
 like teachers, doctors and staff members so on. During
this
 kind of
jobs
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, it became necessary to wear a
dress
 because it
also
gerenate
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generates
equal
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 attitude in the individuals ,
those
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who
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 are working. So,
this
 thing rise
a
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stability and
the
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cooperation between each other at
working
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the working
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 place.
For example
, managers had high income as compared to
staff
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a staff
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member
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members
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.
Thus
, they can able to wear luxury clothes,
infront
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in front
 staff members and they don't feel comfortable at
work
 .
As a result
,
uniform
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the uniform
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 is
also
 compulsory to wear in some job fields.
To conclude
, it is clear from the above discussion that
although
 there are abundant merits of not wearing
dress
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 code ,
however
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 it is necessary to wear
according
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one according
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 to the environment of
job
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the job
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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