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Some business find that their new employees lack in basic interpersonal skills such as the lack of ability to work with colleagues as a team. What are the causes and suggest possible solutions? Also provide relevant examples from your experience.

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Nowadays, many
companies
 faced some difficulties which are related to interpersonal skills between employees. They cannot
work
 together as a team. There are some causes of
this
 problem and resolutions how to solve them. Personally, I believe that these problems will be easily solved. So,
this
 essay will examine
this
 thought-provoking issue.
To begin
 with , the fundamental concept of the lack of ability to
work
 together is different people's perspectives on the world.
This
 is the main source of all problems. It can be everything.
For instance
, individuals can admire different political leaders , clothes brands , influencers etc.
As a result
 , they can have misunderstandings with each other and the desire to communicate will disappear.
In addition
, employees can be antisocial.
Hence
, it will be hard to make a normal connection with
this
 group of people.
In addition
 ,
also
 , it can hinge on
work
 conditions.
For example
, my mum told me when she worked in the old, shabby office she did not
has
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 the desire to
work
 well and even she did not have the wish to communicate with her colleagues. It was caused by the fact that everything distracted and annoyed her.
However
, there are many resolutions to solve
this
 issue.
Firstly
,
companies
 have to provide good and calm conditions for their staff.
Also
 ,
companies
 can arrange for their
workers
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workers'
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 different webinars and invite successful speakers in order to cultivate and alleviate social and teamwork skills.
Furthermore
,
companies
 should make a careful selection of people when they recruit them to
work
. I mean they have to recognise does
this
 person is argumentative , antisocial or not.
By way
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 of conclusion, there are some solutions to
this
 problem.
Companies
 must help their workers enhance social and teamwork skills.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interpersonal skills
  • teamwork
  • collaborative skills
  • work-ready capabilities
  • practical skills
  • digital communication
  • peer interaction
  • mentoring
  • onboarding process
  • integration
  • isolation
  • curriculum development
  • internships
  • real-world experience
  • individual performance
  • group projects
  • company culture
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