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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten to much. Summarize the information by the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten to much. Summarize the information by the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The three
pie
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 charts
represents
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represent
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 the differences
proportion
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in proportion
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 with respect to nutrition substance (
sodium
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, saturated fat, added sugar) in breakfast, lunch,
dinner
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 and snack. At the first glance, the show flow charts describe the amount of intake with
dinner
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 in a lot of meals
is
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as
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 the largest. In the first
pie
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 chart about
sodium
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, it can
be clearly observe
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be clearly observed
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 that the proportion with
dinner
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take
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takes
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 the first place
about
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at about
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 43%. And we can see that
she
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the
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snack
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snacks
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 and breakfast have percentages of
sodium
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are
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that are
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 similar, both are small minorities.
In the
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The
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 second
pie
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 chart outlines
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an
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introduction
on
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to
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 saturated fat. It is apparently seen that the
content
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 in
dinner
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's saturated
also
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top
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tops
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 the list. And breakfast has similar
content
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 in
sodium
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 and saturated fat,
lunch
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and lunch
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 has similar
content
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 with these nutrition staff, too. Have almost roughly
on
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one
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 quarter. Now turn in to the details in
third
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a third
the third
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pie
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 chart, the graph shows the
datas
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data
 on added sugars and it's
clean
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clear
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 from the data we know that snacks have the largest
content
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, nearly around half. In the end,
acrossing
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crossing
across
 the three
pie
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 charts, we know that the
sodium
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 and saturated fat
content
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 are the primary in
dinner
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, and snacks are occupied with added sugar. We have to keep
balance
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the balance
a balance
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 of nutrition for our health.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, sodium, dinner, content with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average percentages
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • meal
  • typical meals
  • categories
  • high percentage
  • distribution
  • patterns
  • trends
  • nutrient-dense
  • data
  • comparison
  • summarize
  • reporting main features
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