You want to start your own small business. Write a letter to a bank requesting information about obtaining a business loan to finance your new company. In your letter, include the following information: what kind of business you want to start how much money you need the length of time over which you would expect to repay the money

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to enquire about obtaining
loan
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a loan
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to finance my business.
Firstly
, I would to know what kind of documents l need for getting credit for my new business.
Many
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years I had
practiced
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in
area
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the area
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of cooking. And
finally
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when I become
chef
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a chef
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I decided to build my own restaurant. After some
plans
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I decided to borrow from your bank around 1 million
dollar
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. It must be the
most large
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largest
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cafeteria in our small city.
That is
one of
biggest
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the biggest
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reason
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that I will refund your money.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial forecast
  • cash flow analysis
  • target market
  • startup capital
  • business plan
  • profitability
  • repayment schedule
  • collateral
  • creditworthiness
  • entrepreneurial venture
  • capital expenditure
  • industry analysis
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