You want to start your own small business. Write a letter to a bank requesting information about obtaining a business loan to finance your new company. In your letter, include the following information: what kind of business you want to start how much money you need the length of time over which you would expect to repay the money

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to enquire about obtaining
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to finance my business.
, I would to know what kind of documents l need for getting credit for my new business.
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years I had
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the area
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of cooking. And
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when I become
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a chef
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I decided to build my own restaurant. After some
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I decided to borrow from your bank around 1 million
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. It must be the
most large
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cafeteria in our small city.
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that I will refund your money.
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