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There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do

#bus #service #reliability #area #two #weeks #manager #company
Dear Mr Joe, I, Kumarjeet Poddar,
currently
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 associated with Capgemini India and I reside in Mumbai, precisely Santacruz. So, I prefer
bus
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 to commute to my office location. Nowadays, I am facing some issues.
Hence
, I would like to tell you that
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 of buses
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 not optimistic.
Firstly
, travelling from Santacruz to Airoli is
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 tedious task for me but you have provided
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 facilities and it is convenient for people like me but
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 a few days, buses are not regular and it directly impacts
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my
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 working hours
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 my office.
Additionally
, It has been seen that for two weeks
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 of
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 has decreased.
Due to
this
, I am unable to reach to
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office on the time.
Therefore
, I need to take
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 route and it is too much
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. I would like to inform you that please check it personally because
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I have raised
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 multiple times but your company does not
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 any
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.
Moreover
,
you
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please take the necessary actions and please try to find reasons for
this
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. I hope that you will take some
actions
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 as soon as possible. yours faithfully, Kumarjeet Poddar
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