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In many places, new homes are needed. But the only space for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

#places #homes #space #countryside #people
Nowadays is so hard to find a good apartment or a house in a city. Especially if you have a big family with small kids and pets.
Cost
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 of living in cities like NY is so high and space so limited that people start to
chose
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living
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to live
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 in the
countryside
.
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 a property in a small village is cheaper than
rent
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renting
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 a tiny flat in
the
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a
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 busy city. You can build or buy a new spacious home in the
countryside
 for
reasonable
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 price. And you get not only a house but a lot of benefits that come with living near nature. Fresh air,
small
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a small
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 community, more safety, and a lot of
countryside
 activities available for newcomers. More and more people enjoy
this
 type of country lifestyle. But
in
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 the other hand, some people think that it
a
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bad idea to build new houses in the
countryside
. They want to protect
they
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the
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 small communities, unique old-fashion architecture, and nature. I think that moving to the
countryside
 is an excellent idea.
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