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Band 2

In many places, new homes are needed. But the only space for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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Nowadays is so hard to find a good apartment or a house in a city. Especially if you have a big family with small kids and pets.
Cost
Correct article usage
The cost

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 of living in cities like NY is so high and space so limited that people start to
chose
Change the verb
choose

It appears that the verb chose should be in the base form as part of the to-infinitive following start. Consider changing the verb form.

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living
Change the verb form
to live

The verb chose is usually followed by the to-infinitive, not by a gerund. Change living to the to-infinitive form.

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 in the
countryside
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

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Buy
Wrong verb form
Buying

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb Buy. Consider changing it.

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 a property in a small village is cheaper than
rent
Wrong verb form
renting

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb rent. Consider changing it.

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 a tiny flat in
the
Correct article usage
a

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 busy city. You can build or buy a new spacious home in the
countryside
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 for
reasonable
Add an article
a reasonable

The noun phrase reasonable price seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 price. And you get not only a house but a lot of benefits that come with living near nature. Fresh air,
small
Correct article usage
a small

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 community, more safety, and a lot of
countryside
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 type of country lifestyle. But
in
Change preposition
on

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 the other hand, some people think that it
a
Add a missing verb
is a

It seems that you are missing a verb. Consider adding it.

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bad idea to build new houses in the
countryside
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

. They want to protect
they
Correct your spelling
the

The word they doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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 small communities, unique old-fashion architecture, and nature. I think that moving to the
countryside
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 is an excellent idea.

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Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Ecological benefits
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Sustainable development
  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
  • Government policies
  • Urban sprawl
  • Infrastructure
  • Smart planning
  • Agricultural lands
  • Rural areas
  • Population growth
  • Environmental sensitivity
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