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You have an appointment with the bank and now you realized that you can't make it for that. Write a letter to the manager.

#appointment #bank #manager
Dear Manager. I am writing to you know
due to
 our appointment that we
agreed
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 make
this
 afternoon. I know my situation with the bank, but I do not see
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any other
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other
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 way, we have to
postponed
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for
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until
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next
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the next
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 date available. Sometimes the plan that you made for the day
do
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does
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 not go
like
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 you plan, and
this
 is the day that everything was wrong. My boss come to me with some ideas about one project that we are creating here in our studio and he
need
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 to
me
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be
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drawing
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 some
skecthes
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sketches
 for today, and I can say no. I know the importance of
the
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words and
sure
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 of your time, it is hard to find
a
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awsome
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awesome
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 manager like you in
this
 day and I
appriciate
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appreciate
 that. I am not a person who
make
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makes
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a
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an
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 appointment and
do
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 not show up, I think
this
 is terrible. I hope that we can
reeschedule
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reschedule
rescheduled
 for next week and
you
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that you
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 understand my situation
on
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this
 afternoon. For the next time, make sure the dinner
it
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is on me! Yours
Sincerelly
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Sincerely
 Phill
Dunohy
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Dunphy
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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