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The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart shows the process of making carbonated
drinks
 in
details
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detail
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. It
take
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takes
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 us
step
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to step
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 by
step
 to understand how it started until it
delivered
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was delivered
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 to the stores.
Further
, the process goes over five stages each stage has
his
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its
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 own approach to
complete
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completing
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 it perfectly.
To begin
 with, carbonated
drinks
is
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are
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 popular in our society and many consider
it
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them
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as
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apply
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their favourite drink.
Moreover
,
does
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do
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 they know how the company produce It
to
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for
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storages
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storage
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? The first
step
,
water
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is water
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 cleaning which
it
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apply
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is raw the
water
 inside the filter to make it
more clean
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cleaner
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 and without chemicals.
After
this
, the heating evaporation and carbonation when you add the carbon dioxide by electric heaters to the
water
.
Following
this
,
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 is the most
importnat
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important
 stage which mixing and in
this
 process by using colouring, syrup, and flavour the tank
mixed
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mixes
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water
 perfectly with the carbon dioxide.
Last
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step
 in
the
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apply
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company production, is whether to put it in bottles or cans and
this
 is named
filtering
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the filtering
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 and filling stage.
Finally
 the shipment
on
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is on
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 the road to
deliever
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deliver
 the carbonated
drinks
 to the supermarkets.
Finally
,
this
 is how companies produce one of the famous
drinks
 in our meantime.
In addition
, now choose your flavour and enjoy your drink
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words drinks, step, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Filtration
  • Water softening
  • Chemical treatment
  • Evaporation
  • Cooling pipe
  • Carbonation
  • Carbon dioxide
  • High pressure
  • Syrup
  • Flavor
  • Color
  • Stirring
  • Uniformity
  • Secondary filtration
  • Bottling
  • Canning
  • Packaging
  • Distribution
  • Retail outlets
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